Poem i wrote

Our Story starts with a kiss

A girl and boy who i will miss

They started sweet and fell in love

Like two angels sent from above

First week together they became one

Knowing this wont be undone

Months go by and nothings changed

They dance together in the rain



A year goes by she starts to worry

A night of fun was far too hurried

She takes the test and tells her dad

It was all ok but things get bad

Her parents start to take control

Keeping us apart now their goal



A month goes by and things get strained

Arguements often they cant take the pain

They try to meet. relight the flame

He knows that she is not to blame

She says to meet but knows she lies

He finds this out but says its fine



Things start to shake. he turns away

Keeps his feelings out the fray

Again she lies. things get intense

Friends begin to show their sense

Endure for now. he tells Himself

Denial cant effect your health



Heart feels heavy. is this real?

Goto sleep and let it heal

Things start to get much worse

Cant help but scream and curse

Big mistake. now shes mad

A night alone. feeling sad



Weeks go by. He gets a letter

Its from her. He feels much better

They start to talk. now there great

Hiding feelings. is this fake?

Another night another fight

That first week now outta sight



Lost and hurt he sees another

Angered passion beneath the covers

She doesnt know and he wont say

Deep down he knows its not ok

They barely speak its nearly done

Accepting theres no more fun



Finally he asks her what she feels

She says its over. it'll never heal

He drops his head and says shes right

All they ever do is fight

They look each other in the eyes

Saying their final goodbye.

Comments

Very deep bro. Its really good.

I also wrote my EX a poem when we broke up the last time. She wanted to show it to her friends and teachers, but her current BF deleted it from her phone :).

I didnt give up and failed miserably..
 
Quite deep poem! Kinda have experienced those words, but here I am! xD
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Well..everytime you share your time with someone, it will be likely to love / suffer. But all of us are denied to do NOT love. We need it somehow, but our self-esteem means love also, and it´s the most important thing here, even than a bf/gf.
 
[quote name='Coto' post='3533280' date='Mar 21 2011, 05:47 PM']Quite deep poem! Kinda have experienced those words, but here I am! xD
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Well..everytime you share your time with someone, it will be likely to love / suffer. But all of us are denied to do NOT love. We need it somehow, but our self-esteem means love also, and it´s the most important thing here, even than a bf/gf.[/quote]

I agree. Sometimes its more than just love. We get attached to people, get used to them. Its pretty complicated how the Human mind takes things in lol.
 
Usually I find poems in this fashion cheezy, but I wont lie, this is excellent. Very deep. . . <3
 

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